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Andrew Guilfoyle Cambridge CELTA, Cambridge DELTA, Cambridge CELTA teacher-trainer, M.Ed

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Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (16 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (16 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’ Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). You don’t want something complicated and somewhat meaningless as the above picture. You want to give a message much simpler and more clearly, right. Go to my IELTS Writing Task Two book, Tip 15: ‘Organise Your Paragraphs’, which gives three examples of ‘circling’ paragraphs. These paragraphs just repeat, and repeat, and repeat, the same thoughts. The section concludes by saying ..   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (15 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 13 & 14 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (15 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 13 & 14 of 30   In the last post, we reduced a 82-word paragraph to 18. 82 words cut to 18. Wow! That first paragraph had so much unnecessary stuff. But now, let’s consider how to continue this sentence, and build a real paragraph in a strong and convincing way. We will build it piece by piece, just like the picture above. Tip 16 of my book (‘Include Specific Support’) mentions a simple way to do this. …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (14 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ 13 of 30

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (14 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ 13 of 30 Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). In the previous post, I introduced ‘circling’ paragraphs. These are paragraphs that just go in circles and repeat the same thing. Consider the above picture – it circles, but it is going somewhere. Actually, it would be better if it went somewhere in a straight line! In the previous post, I mentioned that … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (12 of 30)

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (12 of 30): Sentences Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). The picture above is an incredibly complex mixture of countless trillion sandgrains and rock particles, but that’s not what we see, is it? We just see the elegant and beautiful simplicity of those structures. In the same way, when writing, if you can make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (11 of 30)

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (11 of 30) Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). The picture above is very complicated, made up of a million parts, but what we see is something beautifully simple and simply beautiful. It’s clearly ‘just’ a bee getting nectar from a flower. It’s simple, right? In the same way, if you can make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to …   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (10 of 30)

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (10 of 30) Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). That picture of a waterfall is actually complicated, but we don’t see it as something complicated. It is all put together in simple and recognisable patterms In the same way, if you can make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (9 of 30)

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (9 of 30) Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). The picture above is actually composed of millions of small parts, but the parts fit together in clear ways, giving a simple (and beautiful) image, which we can all recognise at once. Think about that when you write. You don’t want lots of complicated words all mixed together to confuse everyone. You want a message which is clear and understandable. So, if you can make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to …   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (8 of 30)

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (8 of 30) Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). That peacock’s feather above is actually incredibly complicated, but all the parts fit together in a simple way to make a clear pattern. That’s the same you should write. If you make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (7 of 30)

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (7 of 30) Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). The picture of the flower above is simply beautiful – beautiful because it’s so simple. Yet it is actually a very complex creation. But nature has presented it simply, not confusingly. We don’t have a mess of detail, but instead the simplicity of elegant lines. Think like that when you write. If you make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (6 of 30)

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (6 of 30): Sentences Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). A butterfly is an incredibly complicated creature, a mixture of many million tiny parts, but we see in the picture above a simpler image. Yes, if you make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (4 of 30)

Yes, it’s back to Concision, Again (4 of 30): Sentences Remember, being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). You want to make complicated things (like the picture above) fit together to be something clear and beautiful. Remember, if you make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to …   move on, say more, and achieve more of the task.   …

Let’s Practice Being Concise (3 of 30): Time to Practise

    Let’s Practice Being Concise (3 of 30) In the previous post, I showed (or proved) that being concise helps give you that ‘clear progression’ in your writing (= IELTS 7). If you make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THOSE WORDS!  You then have time to … …

Yes, it’s back to concision again – The Value of Concision (2 of 30)

The Value of Concision (2 of 30) In the previous post, I quoted from my own IELTS Writing Task Two book (Page 33, at the bottom), which states … This new sentence is much shorter, and makes the same point. That is, the sentence is concise, and concision is a sign of a good writer. Concision helps give you that ‘clear progression’ (= IELTS 7). Thus, if a sentence can make the same point in fewer words, WRITE THAT SENTENCES! You then have time to … …