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Andrew Guilfoyle Cambridge CELTA, Cambridge DELTA, Cambridge CELTA teacher-trainer, M.Ed

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Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (30 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 28 & 29 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (30 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 28 & 29 of 30 In the last post, we reduced a 81-word paragraph to 24. 81 words cut to 24. Wow! That first paragraph had so much unnecessary stuff. But now, let’s consider how to continue this sentence, and build a real paragraph in a strong and convincing way. We will build it piece by piece, just like the picture above. Tip 16 of my book (‘Include Specific Support’) mentions a simple way to do this. …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (29 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 28 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (29 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 28 of 30 Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Let’s keep looking at the paragraph from the previous post, and cut all the circling stuff out of it. Make it simple and clear, like the above picture. The original paragraph is …   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (28 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (28 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’ Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Go to my IELTS Writing Task Two book, Tip 15: ‘Organise Your Paragraphs’, which gives two examples of ‘circling’ paragraphs. These paragraphs just repeat, and repeat, and repeat, the same thoughts, leaving the reader trapped in a maze (like the picture above). The reader wants to go somewhere, not in circles. The section of the book concludes by saying ..   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (27 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 25 & 26 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (27 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 25 & 26 of 30 In the last post, we reduced a 75-word paragraph to 19. 74 words cut to 19. Wow! That first paragraph had so much unnecessary stuff. But now, let’s consider how to continue this sentence, and build a real paragraph in a strong and convincing way. We will build it piece by piece, just like the picture above. Tip 16 of my book (‘Include Specific Support’) mentions a simple way to do this.   …

[分享] 雅思安德魯 Andrew 課後心得

作者kannbibi (KaNnBiBi) 看板IELTS 標題 [分享] 雅思安德魯 Andrew 課後心得 時間Sun Nov 18 23:35:27 2018 「代po文」 第一次到PTT發文,主要是想分享一下雅思補習的心得。 個人由於工作的關係,沒辦法全職準備。除了平日晚間下班後讀書之外,另外請假幾週準 備雅思,2018/06考試成績L:7, R:7, W:6, S:6, O:6.5。 考試準備方面,聽、讀練完劍10-12,上下班會聽6 Minute English;寫作和口說基本上 …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (26 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 25 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (26 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 25 of 30 Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Let’s keep looking at the paragraph from the previous post, and cut all the circling stuff out of it. Let’s change it from that messy painting to an elegant one with clear style and content (like the above photo). The original paragraph is …   …

[心得] 一戰雅思7.5,推薦Andrew寫作課

作者aannddy (aaannddy) 看板IELTS 標題 [心得] 一戰雅思7.5,推薦Andrew寫作課 時間Sat Nov 10 20:50:00 2018 幫朋友代PO 今年10/27考試, O:7.5 L:8.5 /R:8.5 /W:6.5 /S:6 因為是很突然的決定申請明年的研究所後,所以七月才趕緊準備雅思。 覺得準備雅思的四個月,是漫漫長路,摸索的過程也常很不知所措跟沮喪, …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (25 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (25 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’ Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). You don’t want your paragraph to look like the above pciture, do you? Rather than a mess of random and circling thoughts saying the same thing, there must be a definite pattern, right? Go to my IELTS Writing Task Two book, Tip 15: ‘Organise Your Paragraphs’, which gives two examples of ‘circling’ paragraphs. These paragraphs just repeat, and repeat, and repeat, the same thoughts. The section concludes by saying ..   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (24 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 22 & 23 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (24 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 22 & 23 of 30 In the last post, we reduced a 67-word paragraph to 22. 67 words cut to 22! Wow! That first paragraph had so much unnecessary stuff. But now, let’s consider how to continue this sentence, and build a real paragraph in a strong and convincing way. We will build it piece by piece, just like the picture above. Tip 16 of my book (‘Include Specific Support’) mentions a simple way to do this. Approach …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (23 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 22 of 30

    Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (23 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 22 of 30 Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Let’s keep looking at the paragraph from the previous post, and cut all the circling stuff out of it. Let’s make the pattern much simpler and easier to understand, like the above picture. The original paragraph is … …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (22 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (22 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’ Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). You don’t want your paragraph to be as detailed and confusing as the above picture, do you? Go to my IELTS Writing Task Two book, Tip 15: ‘Organise Your Paragraphs’, which gives two examples of ‘circling’ paragraphs. These paragraphs just repeat, and repeat, and repeat, the same thoughts. The section concludes by saying ..   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (21 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 19 & 20 of 30

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (21 of 30): Re-writing the ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 19 & 20 of 30 In the last post, we reduced a 77-word paragraph to 20. 77 words cut to 20. Wow! That first paragraph had so much unnecessary stuff. But now, let’s consider how to continue this sentence, and build a real paragraph in a strong and convincing way. We will build it piece by piece, just like the picture above. Tip 16 of my book (‘Include Specific Support’) mentions a simple way to do this. Approach 1 …

雅思一戰 overall7.0 L8.5 Andrew補習

作者jesse77 (JJ) 看板IELTS 標題 [心得]雅思一戰 overall7.0 L8.5 Andrew補習 時間Wed Oct 24 15:05:42 2018 [原po沒帳號代PO] 成績(9/15考試):L:8.5 R:7.0 W:6.0 S:7.0 Overall:7.0 準備時間:兩個月(60天整)。第一個月補習,第二個月自修(寫真題、和朋友一起練口說) 。 背景: …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (20 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 19 of 30

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (20 of 30): Answer to ‘Circling Paragraph’ from 19 of 30 Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Let’s keep looking at the paragraph from the previous post, and cut all the circling stuff out of it, and try to make the ‘wiring’ as clear and neat as the above photograph. The original paragraph is …   …

Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (19 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’

  Yes, it’s Back to Concision, Again (19 of 30): Another ‘Circling Paragraph’ Remember, we are now looking at concision in a bigger way: by looking at the whole paragraph (rather than just at the sentence level). Go to my IELTS Writing Task Two book, Tip 15: ‘Organise Your Paragraphs’, which gives two examples of ‘circling’ paragraphs. These paragraphs just repeat, and repeat, and repeat, the same thoughts, and it’s often messy and confusing, like the picture above. The section concludes by saying ..   …