Concision: the key to IELTS 7 (4 of 8) // Let’s practise being concise

By | October 15, 2017

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Let’s Practice Being Concise (4 of 8)

Try making the following sentences more concise. The answers will be given and explained in the next post.

1.

Although people buy guns from certified stores, they can still buy guns from illegal stores as well. [17 words]

2.

Some countries, such as Taiwan, have applied this strategy, and some of the smokers in those countries have responded to the monetary pressure, and reduced their amount of smoking. [29 words]

3.

One reason for the massacre is depressed teenagers or people who have mental illness could buy firearms more easily. [19 words]

4.

Guns being misused is very commonly seen in our daily lives. [11 words]

5.

This could be useful in the event that burglars manage to break in and illegally enter the house, or home invaders manager to enter the house illegally. [27 words]

Answers to Concision 3 of 8

1.

Customers can confirm the quality of the items and ensure the products are suitable for their needs. [17 words]

… becomes …

Customers can confirm the quality and suitability of the items. [10 words]

2.

They can find the cheapest price, to lower their expense, and that way save money for other purchases. [18 words]

… becomes …

They can find the cheapest price. [6 words]

3.

Recently, I have been told that I have been accepted … [10 words]

… becomes …

I have been accepted … [4 words]

4.

Books are highest, and these are followed by newspapers, which are less than books by 20%. [16 words]

… becomes …

Books are highest, followed by newspapers at 20% less. [9 words]

5.

As a role of mother and father, they want … [9 words]

… becomes …

Parent want … [2 words]

By the way, go to aisielts.com to get more information and resources to help you get that IELTS 7. 

Author: Andrew

Andrew Guilfoyle Cambridge CELTA, Cambridge DELTA, Cambridge CELTA teacher-trainer, M.Ed